1. Phân tích đề và nhóm thông tin

 

Đề bài

The graph below compares the proportion of time Australian parents spent helping their children with different activities in the year 2013.

Dạng biểu đồ

Bar Chart

 

Xác định đặc điểm tổng quan (Overview Features)

Đặc điểm nổi bật 1: Mothers spent considerably more time than fathers helping their children individually in every activity.

Đặc điểm nổi bật 2: Joint participation by both parents was most common in playing games and preparing children for bed, while fathers consistently accounted for the smallest proportions.

 

Chia nhóm dữ liệu cho các đoạn Thân bài (Data Grouping)

Body 1 Grouping: Dressing and homework

Ý 1: Mothers' and fathers' individual contributions

Ý 2: Time spent by both parents together

 

Body 2 Grouping: Playing games and preparing for bed

Ý 1: Joint participation

Ý 2: Individual contributions from mothers and fathers

 

Triển khai phân tích

Mở bài (Paraphrase)

The bar chart compares the proportions of time Australian mothers, fathers and both parents together spent helping their children with four different activities in 2013.

(Tạm dịch: Biểu đồ cột so sánh tỷ lệ thời gian mà các bà mẹ, ông bố và cả hai phụ huynh cùng dành để giúp con thực hiện bốn hoạt động khác nhau tại Úc vào năm 2013.)

 

Tóm tắt tổng quan (Overview)

Overall, mothers spent substantially more time than fathers assisting their children on their own across all activities. Meanwhile, joint participation was particularly common when parents played games with their children or prepared them for bed, whereas fathers consistently recorded the lowest figures.

(Tạm dịch: Nhìn chung, các bà mẹ dành nhiều thời gian hơn đáng kể so với các ông bố khi hỗ trợ con một mình trong tất cả các hoạt động. Trong khi đó, việc cả hai phụ huynh cùng tham gia phổ biến nhất ở hoạt động chơi trò chơi và chuẩn bị cho con đi ngủ, còn các ông bố luôn có tỷ lệ thấp nhất.)

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2. Lập dàn ý chi tiết cho bài viết

 

Introduction

Paraphrase lại đề bài bằng cách thay thế compares → illustrates, the proportion of time → the percentages of time, helping their children → assisting their children.

Overview

Đặc điểm chung:

• Mothers luôn dành nhiều thời gian hơn fathers khi hỗ trợ riêng.

• Fathers có tỷ lệ thấp nhất ở tất cả các hoạt động.

Điểm nổi bật:

• Cả hai phụ huynh cùng tham gia nhiều nhất ở playing games và preparing for bed.

• Dressing là hoạt động chủ yếu do mẹ đảm nhận.

 

Body Paragraph 1

Trật tự sắp xếp: Dressing → Homework.

Topic sentence: Mothers played the dominant role in helping with dressing and homework.

Detail 1: Around 75% of dressing assistance was provided by mothers, while fathers accounted for less than 5%. Approximately 23% of the time, both parents helped together.

Detail 2: A similar pattern can be seen in homework, with mothers contributing just over 50%, compared with around 10% for fathers. Joint participation was also relatively common, at approximately 45%.

 

Body Paragraph 2

Trật tự sắp xếp: Playing games → Preparing for bed.

Topic sentence: By contrast, the remaining activities involved greater participation from both parents together.

Detail 1: Nearly 70% of the time spent playing games involved both parents, whereas mothers accounted for only about 25% and fathers roughly 5%.

Detail 2: Likewise, preparing children for bed was mainly a shared activity, with just over 50% of the time involving both parents. Mothers contributed around 43%, while fathers again recorded the lowest figure, at about 5%.

 

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3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

The bar chart compares the proportions of time Australian mothers, fathers and both parents together spent helping their children with four different activities in 2013.

Overall, mothers spent substantially more time than fathers assisting their children on their own across all activities. Meanwhile, joint participation was particularly common when parents played games with their children or prepared them for bed, whereas fathers consistently recorded the lowest figures.

Mothers played the dominant role in helping with dressing and homework. Around 75% of dressing assistance was provided by mothers, while fathers accounted for less than 5%. Only about 23% of the time was spent by both parents together. A similar pattern was seen in homework, where mothers contributed just over 50%, compared with around 14% for fathers. Joint participation was also relatively high at approximately 47%.

By contrast, the remaining activities involved greater participation from both parents. Nearly 70% of the time spent playing games involved mothers and fathers together, whereas mothers accounted for only about 25% and fathers roughly 5%. Likewise, preparing children for bed was mainly a shared activity, with just over half of the time involving both parents. Mothers contributed around 43%, while fathers again recorded the lowest figure, at about 6%.

(Word count: 184)

 

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4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

1. help with (verb phrase): hỗ trợ, giúp đỡ

E.g. Parents help with their children's daily activities.

2. assist children (verb phrase): hỗ trợ trẻ em

E.g. Mothers usually assist children with homework.

3. joint participation (noun phrase): sự tham gia của cả hai

E.g. Joint participation was highest in playing games.

4. individual contribution (noun phrase): sự đóng góp riêng

E.g. Mothers made the largest individual contribution.

5. account for (verb phrase): chiếm

E.g. Fathers accounted for only a small proportion.

6. provide assistance (verb phrase): cung cấp sự hỗ trợ

E.g. Mothers provided most of the assistance.

7. play the dominant role (verb phrase): đóng vai trò chủ đạo

E.g. Mothers played the dominant role in dressing children.

8. shared activity (noun phrase): hoạt động cùng nhau

E.g. Preparing for bed was mainly a shared activity.

9. record the lowest figure (verb phrase): ghi nhận mức thấp nhất

E.g. Fathers recorded the lowest figure in every category.

10. proportion of time (noun phrase): tỷ lệ thời gian

E.g. The proportion of time varied across activities.

11. on one's own (prepositional phrase): một mình

E.g. Mothers often helped their children on their own.

12. compared with (prepositional phrase): so với

E.g. Mothers spent much more time compared with fathers.

 

Sentence Structures

 

1. The bar chart compares the proportions of time + different groups + spent doing + activity. (Dùng để mở bài cho dạng Bar Chart.)

E.g. The bar chart compares the proportions of time parents spent helping their children.

2. Overall, + group + accounted for the highest proportions, whereas + group + consistently recorded the lowest figures. (Dùng để viết Overview.)

E.g. Overall, mothers accounted for the highest proportions, whereas fathers consistently recorded the lowest figures.

3. In + activity +, + group + accounted for around + percentage +, compared with + percentage + for + comparison group. (Dùng để so sánh số liệu.)

E.g. In dressing, mothers accounted for around 75%, compared with less than 5% for fathers.

4. A similar pattern can be observed in + activity +, where + group + contributed + percentage +. (Dùng để mô tả xu hướng tương tự.)

E.g. A similar pattern can be observed in homework, where mothers contributed just over 50%.

5. By contrast, + activity + mainly involved + group +, accounting for approximately + percentage +. (Dùng để chuyển sang nhóm dữ liệu khác.)

E.g. By contrast, playing games mainly involved both parents, accounting for approximately 70%.

6. Meanwhile, + group + made only a limited contribution, at around + percentage +. (Dùng để nhấn mạnh tỷ lệ thấp.)

E.g. Meanwhile, fathers made only a limited contribution, at around 5%.

 

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