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IELTS Writing Practice: If people were to choose between not working at all and working most of the time, they would always favor the option of not working. Do you support or oppose the idea
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1. Xây dựng ý tưởng

Đề bài

If people were to choose between not working at all and working most of the time, they would always favor the option of not working. To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?

Dạng bài

Agree or Disagree Essay

Xác định chủ đề và luận điểm

Topic: Motivation for Work

 

Luận điểm 1: Reasons supporting the statement

Desire for leisure and relaxation: mong muốn được nghỉ ngơi và thư giãn

Avoidance of workplace stress: tránh áp lực công việc

More time for family and personal interests: có nhiều thời gian hơn cho gia đình và sở thích cá nhân

Freedom from professional responsibilities: tự do khỏi các trách nhiệm nghề nghiệp

Improved work-life balance: cân bằng cuộc sống và công việc tốt hơn

Opportunity to pursue hobbies and travel: cơ hội theo đuổi sở thích và du lịch

 

Luận điểm 2: Reasons opposing the statement

Sense of purpose and achievement: cảm giác có mục đích và thành tựu

Financial necessity and security: nhu cầu và sự ổn định tài chính

Personal and professional development: phát triển cá nhân và nghề nghiệp

Social interaction and belonging: tương tác xã hội và cảm giác thuộc về cộng đồng

Contribution to society: đóng góp cho xã hội

Fulfillment through meaningful work: sự thỏa mãn từ công việc có ý nghĩa

 

Triển khai ý tưởng

 

Position

I disagree with the idea that people would always choose not to work. While most individuals appreciate leisure time, many people gain satisfaction, purpose, and personal growth from meaningful employment.

→ Tôi không đồng ý với quan điểm rằng mọi người luôn muốn không phải làm việc. Mặc dù hầu hết mọi người đều thích thời gian nghỉ ngơi, nhiều người vẫn tìm thấy sự hài lòng, mục đích sống và cơ hội phát triển bản thân thông qua công việc có ý nghĩa.

Ví dụ:

Retired individuals returning to part-time work because they miss social interaction

Entrepreneurs continuing to work despite already being financially successful

 


 

2. Lập dàn ý cho đề theo PEEL

 

Introduction

Paraphrase: some people believe individuals would prefer not to work if given the choice

Question: extent of agreement or disagreement

Thesis: I disagree because work provides not only income but also personal fulfillment and social value

 

Body Paragraph 1

Point: many people would enjoy not working due to the freedom it offers

Evidence: more leisure time, reduced stress, ability to pursue hobbies and spend time with family

Explanation: work can be demanding and exhausting

Link: therefore, some individuals would choose not to work if financial concerns were removed

 

Body Paragraph 2

Point: work fulfills many important psychological and social needs

Evidence: sense of purpose, achievement, social interaction, contribution to society

Explanation: employment provides meaning and opportunities for growth

Link: for many people, these benefits make work a valuable part of life rather than a burden

 

Conclusion

Summary: leisure is attractive, but work serves purposes beyond earning money

Restate: many people would continue working because of the satisfaction and meaning it provides

 


 

3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

Some people argue that if individuals had the choice between working most of the time and not working at all, they would always prefer not to work. While leisure and freedom are undoubtedly attractive, I disagree with this view because work provides many benefits beyond financial rewards.

On the one hand, there are valid reasons why some people might prefer not to work. Employment often involves long hours, demanding responsibilities, and significant pressure. Choosing not to work would allow individuals to enjoy a greater desire for leisure and relaxation, spend more time with loved ones, and pursue personal interests. In addition, freedom from work can help people avoid burnout and achieve an improved work-life balance. If financial needs were already met, many individuals would likely welcome the opportunity to travel, develop hobbies, or simply enjoy a less stressful lifestyle.

However, work serves purposes that go far beyond earning money. One important benefit is the sense of purpose and achievement that people gain from accomplishing goals and overcoming challenges. Employment also encourages personal and professional development, allowing individuals to acquire new skills and improve their abilities. Furthermore, workplaces provide opportunities for social interaction and belonging, helping people build friendships and professional relationships. Many individuals are also motivated by a contribution to society, particularly in professions such as healthcare, education, and public service. Even wealthy entrepreneurs and successful professionals often continue working because they experience fulfillment through meaningful work rather than because they need additional income.

In conclusion, although many people would enjoy having more free time, I do not believe they would always choose not to work. For many individuals, work provides purpose, personal growth, and social connections that are essential for a satisfying life.

(Word count: 289)

 


 

4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

  1. desire for leisure and relaxation (noun phrase): mong muốn được nghỉ ngơi và thư giãn

    E.g. Most people have a desire for leisure and relaxation after a busy week.

  2. avoidance of workplace stress (noun phrase): tránh áp lực công việc

    E.g. Early retirement offers the avoidance of workplace stress.

  3. more time for family and personal interests (noun phrase): có nhiều thời gian hơn cho gia đình và sở thích cá nhân

    E.g. Flexible schedules provide more time for family and personal interests.

  4. freedom from professional responsibilities (noun phrase): tự do khỏi các trách nhiệm nghề nghiệp

    E.g. Some retirees enjoy the freedom from professional responsibilities.

  5. improved work-life balance (noun phrase): cân bằng cuộc sống và công việc tốt hơn

    E.g. Remote work can lead to an improved work-life balance.

  6. opportunity to pursue hobbies and travel (noun phrase): cơ hội theo đuổi sở thích và du lịch

    E.g. Retirement offers the opportunity to pursue hobbies and travel.

  7. sense of purpose and achievement (noun phrase): cảm giác có mục đích và thành tựu

    E.g. Many employees gain a sense of purpose and achievement from their jobs.

  8. financial necessity and security (noun phrase): nhu cầu và sự ổn định tài chính

    E.g. Work provides financial necessity and security for most people.

  9. personal and professional development (noun phrase): phát triển cá nhân và nghề nghiệp

    E.g. Employment supports personal and professional development.

  10. social interaction and belonging (noun phrase): tương tác xã hội và cảm giác thuộc về cộng đồng

    E.g. Offices offer opportunities for social interaction and belonging.

  11. contribution to society (noun phrase): đóng góp cho xã hội

    E.g. Healthcare workers make an important contribution to society.

  12. fulfillment through meaningful work (noun phrase): sự thỏa mãn từ công việc có ý nghĩa

    E.g. Many teachers find fulfillment through meaningful work.

  13. demanding responsibilities (noun phrase): trách nhiệm nặng nề

    E.g. Managers often face demanding responsibilities.

  14. personal interests (noun phrase): sở thích cá nhân

    E.g. People need time to pursue personal interests.

  15. less stressful lifestyle (noun phrase): lối sống ít căng thẳng hơn

    E.g. Some people aim for a less stressful lifestyle.

  16. acquire new skills (verb phrase): học thêm kỹ năng mới

    E.g. Employees can acquire new skills through training.

  17. professional relationships (noun phrase): các mối quan hệ nghề nghiệp

    E.g. Networking helps develop professional relationships.

  18. public service (noun phrase): dịch vụ công

    E.g. Many workers dedicate their careers to public service.

  19. wealthy entrepreneurs (noun phrase): doanh nhân giàu có

    E.g. Many wealthy entrepreneurs continue working despite financial success.

  20. satisfying life (noun phrase): cuộc sống viên mãn

    E.g. Meaningful work contributes to a satisfying life.

Sentence Structures

1. While + noun phrase + be + adjective, I disagree with this view because + clause (dùng để nêu quan điểm)

E.g. While leisure and freedom are attractive, I disagree with this view because work provides many benefits beyond financial rewards.

2. Choosing not to work would allow + noun phrase + to + verb + noun phrase (dùng để nêu lợi ích của việc không làm việc)

E.g. Choosing not to work would allow individuals to spend more time with their families.

3. One important benefit is the + noun phrase + that + noun phrase + gain from + V-ing (dùng để trình bày lợi ích của công việc)

E.g. One important benefit is the sense of purpose and achievement that people gain from accomplishing goals.

4. Furthermore, + noun phrase + provide opportunities for + noun phrase, helping + noun phrase + verb + noun phrase (dùng để mở rộng ý)

E.g. Furthermore, workplaces provide opportunities for social interaction, helping people build friendships.

5. Many individuals are motivated by + noun phrase, particularly in + noun phrase (dùng để đưa ví dụ)

E.g. Many individuals are motivated by a contribution to society, particularly in healthcare and education.

6. In conclusion, although + noun phrase + would enjoy + noun phrase, I do not believe + clause (dùng để kết luận)

E.g. In conclusion, although many people would enjoy more free time, I do not believe they would always choose not to work.

 


 

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