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IELTS Writing Practice: Nations with longer average working hours tend to achieve greater economic success but often face adverse social effects. Do you support or oppose this idea?
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1. Xây dựng ý tưởng

Đề bài

Nations with longer average working hours tend to achieve greater economic success but often face adverse social effects.

To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?

Dạng bài

Agree or Disagree Essay

Xác định chủ đề và luận điểm

Topic: Long Working Hours and National Development

 

Luận điểm 1: Longer working hours can contribute to economic success

Higher productivity and output: năng suất và sản lượng cao hơn

Increased business performance and profitability: cải thiện hiệu quả kinh doanh và lợi nhuận

Greater labor input supports economic growth: nguồn lao động đóng góp nhiều hơn cho tăng trưởng kinh tế

Improved international competitiveness: nâng cao khả năng cạnh tranh quốc tế

Faster industrial and economic development: thúc đẩy phát triển công nghiệp và kinh tế nhanh hơn

Attraction of investment through a strong work ethic: thu hút đầu tư nhờ tinh thần làm việc cao

 

Luận điểm 2: Long working hours can create adverse social effects

Poor work-life balance: mất cân bằng giữa công việc và cuộc sống

Increased stress and mental health problems: gia tăng căng thẳng và các vấn đề sức khỏe tinh thần

Reduced time for family relationships: giảm thời gian dành cho gia đình

Lower overall life satisfaction: mức độ hài lòng với cuộc sống thấp hơn

Health issues caused by overwork: các vấn đề sức khỏe do làm việc quá sức

Declining community engagement and social interaction: giảm sự gắn kết cộng đồng và tương tác xã hội

 

Triển khai ý tưởng

 

Position

I largely agree with this statement. Although longer working hours can contribute to economic growth and competitiveness, they frequently result in significant social costs, including poorer health and weaker family relationships.

→ Tôi phần lớn đồng ý với nhận định này. Mặc dù thời gian làm việc dài hơn có thể góp phần thúc đẩy tăng trưởng kinh tế và khả năng cạnh tranh, nó thường dẫn đến những chi phí xã hội đáng kể, bao gồm sức khỏe suy giảm và các mối quan hệ gia đình yếu đi.

Ví dụ:

Rapid economic development in countries with demanding work cultures

Employees experiencing burnout due to excessive workloads

 


 

2. Lập dàn ý cho đề theo PEEL

 

Introduction

Paraphrase: some countries with long working hours achieve strong economic performance but face social challenges

Question: extent of agreement or disagreement

Thesis: largely agree because long working hours can support economic success while creating serious social consequences

 

Body Paragraph 1

Point: extended working hours can strengthen economic performance

Evidence: higher productivity, greater output, competitiveness, investment attraction

Explanation: more labor input often increases economic activity and national income

Link: therefore, long working hours may contribute to economic success

 

Body Paragraph 2

Point: excessive working hours often generate negative social effects

Evidence: stress, health problems, weakened family bonds, reduced leisure time

Explanation: overwork can harm well-being and social cohesion

Link: consequently, economic gains may come at a significant social cost

 

Conclusion

Summary: long working hours can promote economic growth but create social problems

Restate: agree that the statement is largely accurate because economic benefits are often accompanied by adverse social effects

 


 

3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

Many countries with long average working hours have achieved impressive levels of economic growth and productivity. However, these achievements are often accompanied by negative social consequences. I largely agree that while extended working hours can contribute to economic success, they frequently result in adverse effects on individuals and society.

On the one hand, longer working hours can support higher productivity and output, which are important drivers of economic growth. When employees spend more time working, businesses are often able to produce more goods and services, leading to increased business performance and profitability. In addition, a larger amount of labor input can strengthen a country's international competitiveness, particularly in manufacturing and service industries. Nations with a strong work ethic may also attract foreign investment, further accelerating economic development. As a result, longer working hours can play a role in improving national prosperity and living standards.

On the other hand, excessive working hours often create serious social problems. One major issue is poor work-life balance, as employees have less time to spend with family and friends. This can lead to reduced time for family relationships and weaker social connections. Furthermore, long working hours are associated with increased stress and mental health problems, especially when workers face constant pressure to meet demanding targets. Over time, health issues caused by overwork may emerge, including fatigue, sleep disorders, and burnout. These problems not only reduce individual well-being but can also weaken community engagement and overall social cohesion.

In conclusion, I largely support the view that countries with longer working hours often achieve greater economic success. Nevertheless, such benefits frequently come at the expense of social well-being, making it important for governments and employers to promote a healthier balance between work and personal life.

(Word count: 284)

 


 

4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

 

  1. higher productivity and output (noun phrase): năng suất và sản lượng cao hơn

    E.g. Longer working hours can lead to higher productivity and output.

  2. increased business performance and profitability (noun phrase): cải thiện hiệu quả kinh doanh và lợi nhuận

    E.g. Companies seek increased business performance and profitability.

  3. greater labor input supports economic growth (clause): nguồn lao động đóng góp nhiều hơn cho tăng trưởng kinh tế

    E.g. In developing economies, greater labor input supports economic growth.

  4. improved international competitiveness (noun phrase): nâng cao khả năng cạnh tranh quốc tế

    E.g. Efficient industries contribute to improved international competitiveness.

  5. faster industrial and economic development (noun phrase): phát triển công nghiệp và kinh tế nhanh hơn

    E.g. Some countries achieved faster industrial and economic development through intensive work cultures.

  6. attraction of investment through a strong work ethic (noun phrase): thu hút đầu tư nhờ tinh thần làm việc cao

    E.g. The attraction of investment through a strong work ethic can boost economic performance.

  7. poor work-life balance (noun phrase): mất cân bằng giữa công việc và cuộc sống

    E.g. Long working hours often cause poor work-life balance.

  8. increased stress and mental health problems (noun phrase): gia tăng căng thẳng và các vấn đề sức khỏe tinh thần

    E.g. Excessive workloads contribute to increased stress and mental health problems.

  9. reduced time for family relationships (noun phrase): giảm thời gian dành cho gia đình

    E.g. Overtime work leads to reduced time for family relationships.

  10. lower overall life satisfaction (noun phrase): mức độ hài lòng với cuộc sống thấp hơn

    E.g. Employees with long working hours often report lower overall life satisfaction.

  11. health issues caused by overwork (noun phrase): các vấn đề sức khỏe do làm việc quá sức

    E.g. Governments should address health issues caused by overwork.

  12. declining community engagement and social interaction (noun phrase): giảm sự gắn kết cộng đồng và tương tác xã hội

    E.g. Long working schedules may result in declining community engagement and social interaction.

  13. economic growth (noun phrase): tăng trưởng kinh tế

    E.g. Productivity is a key driver of economic growth.

  14. living standards (noun phrase): mức sống

    E.g. Economic success often improves living standards.

  15. foreign investment (noun phrase): đầu tư nước ngoài

    E.g. Governments encourage foreign investment to stimulate development.

  16. manufacturing and service industries (noun phrase): ngành sản xuất và dịch vụ

    E.g. The country relies heavily on manufacturing and service industries.

  17. social connections (noun phrase): các mối quan hệ xã hội

    E.g. Strong social connections improve quality of life.

  18. demanding targets (noun phrase): các mục tiêu khắt khe

    E.g. Employees often face demanding targets at work.

  19. sleep disorders (noun phrase): rối loạn giấc ngủ

    E.g. Long-term stress can cause sleep disorders.

  20. social cohesion (noun phrase): sự gắn kết xã hội

    E.g. Community activities help strengthen social cohesion.

 

Sentence Structures

1. While + noun phrase + can contribute to + noun phrase, it/they often result(s) in + noun phrase (dùng để nêu quan điểm cân bằng)

E.g. While long working hours can contribute to economic growth, they often result in social problems.

2. One reason is that + noun phrase + can lead to + noun phrase (dùng để giải thích lợi ích)

E.g. One reason is that longer working hours can lead to higher productivity and output.

3. In addition, + noun phrase + may strengthen + noun phrase, particularly in + noun phrase (dùng để mở rộng ý)

E.g. In addition, greater labor input may strengthen international competitiveness, particularly in manufacturing industries.

4. One major issue is + noun phrase, as + clause (dùng để trình bày tác hại)

E.g. One major issue is poor work-life balance, as employees have less time for personal activities.

5. Over time, + noun phrase + may emerge, including + noun phrase (dùng để nêu hệ quả)

E.g. Over time, health issues caused by overwork may emerge, including sleep disorders and burnout.

6. In conclusion, while + clause, I largely agree that + clause because + clause (dùng để kết luận)

E.g. In conclusion, while long working hours may promote economic growth, I largely agree that they often create adverse social effects because they harm well-being and family life.

 


 

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