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IELTS Writing Practice: Once students go to school, teachers have a greater influence on their intellectual and social development than parents. Do you agree or disagree with this belief?
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1. Xây dựng ý tưởng

 

Đề bài

Once students go to school, teachers have a greater influence on their intellectual and social development than parents. Do you agree or disagree with this belief?

Dạng bài

Opinion essay

Xác định chủ đề và luận điểm

Topic: Influence of Teachers and Parents on Children’s Development

 

Luận điểm 1: Reasons supporting teachers’ greater influence

Academic knowledge development: phát triển kiến thức học thuật

Social interaction guidance: hướng dẫn tương tác xã hội

Professional teaching expertise: chuyên môn giảng dạy chuyên nghiệp

Structured learning environments: môi trường học tập có tổ chức

Peer relationship management: quản lý mối quan hệ bạn bè

Character and discipline formation: hình thành tính cách và kỷ luật

Exposure to diverse perspectives: tiếp xúc với nhiều góc nhìn khác nhau

 

Luận điểm 2: Reasons supporting parents’ greater influence

Early childhood upbringing: quá trình nuôi dạy từ nhỏ

Emotional support and bonding: hỗ trợ và gắn kết cảm xúc

Moral value formation: hình thành giá trị đạo đức

Long-term behavioral influence: ảnh hưởng hành vi lâu dài

Daily family interaction: tương tác gia đình hằng ngày

Cultural and personal identity: bản sắc văn hóa và cá nhân

Lifelong guidance and support: định hướng và hỗ trợ suốt đời

 

Triển khai ý tưởng

 

Position 1

Although teachers contribute significantly to children’s education and social skills, I believe parents continue to have the greatest influence because they shape children’s values, behavior, and emotional development from an early age.

→ Mặc dù giáo viên đóng góp lớn vào giáo dục và kỹ năng xã hội của trẻ, tôi tin rằng cha mẹ vẫn có ảnh hưởng lớn nhất vì họ định hình giá trị, hành vi và sự phát triển cảm xúc của trẻ từ sớm.

Ví dụ:

Children learning manners from parents

Family influence on personal values

 

Position 2

Teachers have a stronger influence after children begin school because students spend most of their time in educational environments that shape both knowledge and social behavior.

→ Giáo viên có ảnh hưởng mạnh hơn sau khi trẻ bắt đầu đi học vì học sinh dành phần lớn thời gian trong môi trường giáo dục, nơi định hình cả kiến thức và hành vi xã hội.

Ví dụ:

Teachers guiding teamwork and discipline

Classroom social interaction

 


 

2. Lập dàn ý cho đề theo PEEL

 

Introduction

Paraphrase: some people believe teachers influence children more than parents after school begins

Question: whether teachers have a greater impact on intellectual and social development

Thesis: although teachers strongly influence academic and social skills, parents remain more influential because they shape children’s core values and emotional development

 

Body Paragraph 1

Point: teachers contribute significantly to intellectual and social growth

Evidence: classroom learning, discipline, teamwork, communication skills

Explanation: schools expose children to structured learning and peer interaction

Link: teachers play an essential educational role

 

Body Paragraph 2

Point: parents continue to have the strongest overall influence

Evidence: emotional support, moral education, long-term family influence

Explanation: children develop values and behavior mainly through family upbringing

Link: parental influence remains fundamental throughout life

 

Conclusion

Summary: both teachers and parents affect children’s development

Restate: parents ultimately have the greater influence because of their long-term emotional and moral impact

 


 

3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

Many people believe that once children begin school, teachers become more influential than parents in shaping their intellectual and social development. Although teachers certainly play an important role in education and socialization, I disagree with this opinion because parents continue to have the strongest influence on children’s values, behavior, and emotional growth.

Teachers undeniably contribute significantly to academic knowledge development and social skills. At school, children are exposed to structured learning environments where they learn mathematics, science, languages, and other important subjects from professionals with professional teaching expertise. Teachers also assist with social interaction guidance by encouraging teamwork, communication, and respect among classmates. In addition, schools help students develop discipline and responsibility through character and discipline formation. Students also benefit from exposure to diverse perspectives, as they interact with classmates from different backgrounds and experiences. As a result, teachers strongly influence the intellectual and social aspects of children’s development during their school years.

However, I believe parents remain more influential overall because they shape children from the earliest stages of life. Through early childhood upbringing, parents teach basic behavior, manners, and moral principles long before formal education begins. Children often develop their personalities through daily family interaction and emotional experiences at home. Furthermore, strong parental relationships provide important emotional support and bonding, which directly affect children’s confidence and mental well-being. Parents also play a central role in moral value formation by teaching honesty, responsibility, and empathy. Unlike teachers, whose influence may be limited to school hours, parents provide lifelong guidance and support that continues into adulthood. Consequently, parental influence tends to be deeper and more long-lasting.

Overall, although teachers are highly important for children’s intellectual and social development, I believe parents ultimately have the greater influence because they shape children’s emotional foundations, personal values, and long-term behavior.

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4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

  1. academic knowledge development (noun phrase): phát triển kiến thức học thuật

    E.g. Schools focus heavily on academic knowledge development.

  2. social interaction guidance (noun phrase): hướng dẫn tương tác xã hội

    E.g. Teachers provide valuable social interaction guidance.

  3. professional teaching expertise (noun phrase): chuyên môn giảng dạy chuyên nghiệp

    E.g. Experienced educators possess strong professional teaching expertise.

  4. structured learning environments (noun phrase): môi trường học tập có tổ chức

    E.g. Children benefit from structured learning environments.

  5. peer relationship management (noun phrase): quản lý mối quan hệ bạn bè

    E.g. Schools help students improve peer relationship management.

  6. character and discipline formation (noun phrase): hình thành tính cách và kỷ luật

    E.g. Sports contribute to character and discipline formation.

  7. exposure to diverse perspectives (noun phrase): tiếp xúc với nhiều góc nhìn khác nhau

    E.g. International education encourages exposure to diverse perspectives.

  8. early childhood upbringing (noun phrase): quá trình nuôi dạy từ nhỏ

    E.g. Good parenting supports positive early childhood upbringing.

  9. emotional support and bonding (noun phrase): hỗ trợ và gắn kết cảm xúc

    E.g. Families provide essential emotional support and bonding.

  10. moral value formation (noun phrase): hình thành giá trị đạo đức

    E.g. Parents influence children’s moral value formation.

  11. long-term behavioral influence (noun phrase): ảnh hưởng hành vi lâu dài

    E.g. Childhood experiences create long-term behavioral influence.

  12. daily family interaction (noun phrase): tương tác gia đình hằng ngày

    E.g. Strong relationships depend on regular daily family interaction.

  13. cultural and personal identity (noun phrase): bản sắc văn hóa và cá nhân

    E.g. Families shape children’s cultural and personal identity.

  14. lifelong guidance and support (noun phrase): định hướng và hỗ trợ suốt đời

    E.g. Parents often provide lifelong guidance and support.

  15. formal education (noun phrase): giáo dục chính quy

    E.g. Children begin formal education at an early age.

  16. teamwork and communication (noun phrase): làm việc nhóm và giao tiếp

    E.g. Schools teach students teamwork and communication skills.

  17. moral principles (noun phrase): nguyên tắc đạo đức

    E.g. Families should teach strong moral principles.

  18. mental well-being (noun phrase): sức khỏe tinh thần

    E.g. Emotional support improves mental well-being.

  19. personal values (noun phrase): giá trị cá nhân

    E.g. Parents strongly influence children’s personal values.

  20. long-lasting influence (noun phrase): ảnh hưởng lâu dài

    E.g. Childhood education can have a long-lasting influence.

 

Sentence Structures

1. Although + subject + certainly + verb, I disagree with + noun phrase + because + clause (dùng để nêu quan điểm phản đối rõ ràng)

E.g. Although teachers certainly play an important role in education and socialization, I disagree with this opinion because parents continue to have the strongest influence on children’s values, behavior, and emotional growth.

2. At + noun phrase, + subject + are exposed to + noun phrase + where + clause (dùng để mô tả môi trường học tập hoặc xã hội)

E.g. At school, children are exposed to structured learning environments where they learn mathematics, science, languages, and other important subjects from professionals with professional teaching expertise.

3. In addition, + subject + help(s) + object + develop + noun phrase + through + noun phrase (dùng để giải thích kỹ năng được hình thành)

E.g. In addition, schools help students develop discipline and responsibility through character and discipline formation.

4. However, I believe + subject + remain(s) more influential overall because + clause (dùng để chuyển sang lập trường chính)

E.g. However, I believe parents remain more influential overall because they shape children from the earliest stages of life.

5. Unlike + noun phrase, + subject + provide(s) + noun phrase + that + clause (dùng để so sánh hai đối tượng)

E.g. Unlike teachers, whose influence may be limited to school hours, parents provide lifelong guidance and support that continues into adulthood.

6. Overall, although + noun phrase + are highly important for + noun phrase, I believe + clause because + clause (dùng để kết luận với lập trường nhất quán)

E.g. Overall, although teachers are highly important for children’s intellectual and social development, I believe parents ultimately have the greater influence because they shape children’s emotional foundations, personal values, and long-term behavior.

 


 

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