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IELTS Writing Practice: Some believe it is a positive idea for people to remain employed in their later years if they are able. Do you support or oppose this idea?
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1. Xây dựng ý tưởng

Đề bài

Some believe it is a positive idea for people to remain employed in their later years if they are able.

Do you support or oppose this idea?

Dạng bài

Agree or Disagree Essay

Xác định chủ đề và luận điểm

Topic: Employment in Later Life

 

Luận điểm 1: Continuing to work in old age brings significant benefits

Maintenance of financial independence: duy trì sự độc lập về tài chính

Preservation of mental and physical well-being: duy trì sức khỏe tinh thần và thể chất

Opportunity to remain socially engaged: cơ hội duy trì các mối quan hệ xã hội

Retention and transfer of valuable experience: giữ gìn và truyền đạt kinh nghiệm quý báu

Increased sense of purpose and fulfillment: gia tăng cảm giác có mục đích và ý nghĩa trong cuộc sống

Reduced pressure on pension systems: giảm áp lực lên hệ thống lương hưu

 

Luận điểm 2: There are limitations to working in later years

Declining physical health and energy levels: suy giảm sức khỏe và thể lực

Potential barriers to adapting to new technologies: khó khăn trong việc thích nghi với công nghệ mới

Reduced employment opportunities for younger workers: giảm cơ hội việc làm cho lao động trẻ

Increased workplace stress: gia tăng áp lực công việc

Need for retirement and leisure after years of employment: nhu cầu nghỉ ngơi sau nhiều năm làm việc

Not all occupations are suitable for older employees: không phải nghề nào cũng phù hợp với người cao tuổi

 

Triển khai ý tưởng

 

Position

I generally support the idea that older people should continue working if they are willing and capable because it benefits both individuals and society. However, participation should remain voluntary rather than compulsory.

→ Tôi nhìn chung ủng hộ việc người cao tuổi tiếp tục làm việc nếu họ có khả năng và mong muốn vì điều này mang lại lợi ích cho cả cá nhân lẫn xã hội. Tuy nhiên, việc làm này nên mang tính tự nguyện thay vì bắt buộc.

Ví dụ:

Retired teachers continuing to mentor younger educators

Experienced professionals sharing expertise with younger employees in companies

 


 

2. Lập dàn ý cho đề theo PEEL

 

Introduction

Paraphrase: some people believe older adults should continue working if they are capable

Question: extent of support or opposition

Thesis: support this idea because continued employment provides financial, social, and psychological benefits, although it should remain a personal choice

 

Body Paragraph 1

Point: working later in life benefits individuals and society

Evidence: financial security, social interaction, knowledge transfer, sense of purpose

Explanation: employment helps older adults remain active and engaged

Link: therefore, continued employment can improve quality of life and benefit organizations

 

Body Paragraph 2

Point: there are challenges associated with working in old age

Evidence: health limitations, technological changes, job competition

Explanation: some older people may struggle to meet workplace demands

Link: nevertheless, these concerns do not justify preventing capable seniors from working

 

Conclusion

Summary: working in later life has both advantages and challenges

Restate: support allowing older adults to remain employed if they choose and are capable of doing so

 


 

3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

Many people believe that individuals should continue working in their later years if they are physically and mentally capable of doing so. I generally support this view because remaining employed can provide important benefits for both older adults and society as a whole.

One major advantage of continuing to work is the maintenance of financial independence. Many older people prefer earning an income rather than relying entirely on pensions or family support. Employment can also contribute to the preservation of mental and physical well-being by keeping individuals active and engaged in daily activities. Furthermore, work provides an opportunity to remain socially engaged, helping seniors maintain relationships and avoid loneliness. Another significant benefit is the retention and transfer of valuable experience. Older workers often possess knowledge and skills that can be shared with younger colleagues, improving organizational performance. As a result, continued employment can create an increased sense of purpose and fulfillment while benefiting employers and society.

However, there are some drawbacks to this idea. Certain older adults experience declining physical health and energy levels, making it difficult to perform demanding jobs. In addition, rapid technological changes may create challenges for some workers who struggle to adapt. Critics also argue that older employees may reduce employment opportunities for younger generations. Nevertheless, these concerns should not prevent capable seniors from remaining in the workforce. Individuals differ greatly in their abilities, and many older adults continue to perform effectively well beyond traditional retirement age.

In conclusion, although working in later life may not be suitable for everyone, I support allowing older people to remain employed if they are willing and capable. Doing so promotes financial security, social engagement, and knowledge sharing while benefiting society as a whole.

(Word count: 278)

 


 

4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

 

  1. maintenance of financial independence (noun phrase): duy trì sự độc lập về tài chính

    E.g. Part-time employment helps with the maintenance of financial independence.

  2. preservation of mental and physical well-being (noun phrase): duy trì sức khỏe tinh thần và thể chất

    E.g. Staying active contributes to the preservation of mental and physical well-being.

  3. opportunity to remain socially engaged (noun phrase): cơ hội duy trì sự gắn kết xã hội

    E.g. Volunteering provides an opportunity to remain socially engaged.

  4. retention and transfer of valuable experience (noun phrase): duy trì và truyền đạt kinh nghiệm quý báu

    E.g. Companies benefit from the retention and transfer of valuable experience.

  5. increased sense of purpose and fulfillment (noun phrase): gia tăng cảm giác có mục đích và sự thỏa mãn

    E.g. Meaningful work creates an increased sense of purpose and fulfillment.

  6. reduced pressure on pension systems (noun phrase): giảm áp lực lên hệ thống lương hưu

    E.g. Later retirement can lead to reduced pressure on pension systems.

  7. declining physical health and energy levels (noun phrase): suy giảm sức khỏe và thể lực

    E.g. Some seniors face declining physical health and energy levels.

  8. potential barriers to adapting to new technologies (noun phrase): rào cản trong việc thích nghi với công nghệ mới

    E.g. Older employees may encounter potential barriers to adapting to new technologies.

  9. reduced employment opportunities for younger workers (noun phrase): giảm cơ hội việc làm cho lao động trẻ

    E.g. Critics worry about reduced employment opportunities for younger workers.

  10. increased workplace stress (noun phrase): áp lực công việc gia tăng

    E.g. Long working hours can result in increased workplace stress.

  11. need for retirement and leisure after years of employment (noun phrase): nhu cầu nghỉ ngơi sau nhiều năm làm việc

    E.g. Many people value the need for retirement and leisure after years of employment.

  12. not all occupations are suitable for older employees (clause): không phải nghề nào cũng phù hợp với người cao tuổi

    E.g. It is clear that not all occupations are suitable for older employees.

  13. remain employed (verb phrase): tiếp tục làm việc

    E.g. Some seniors choose to remain employed after retirement age.

  14. traditional retirement age (noun phrase): tuổi nghỉ hưu truyền thống

    E.g. Many people work beyond the traditional retirement age.

  15. family support (noun phrase): sự hỗ trợ từ gia đình

    E.g. Some retirees depend on family support.

  16. younger colleagues (noun phrase): đồng nghiệp trẻ tuổi hơn

    E.g. Experienced workers often mentor younger colleagues.

  17. organizational performance (noun phrase): hiệu quả hoạt động của tổ chức

    E.g. Knowledge sharing improves organizational performance.

  18. workforce participation (noun phrase): sự tham gia vào lực lượng lao động

    E.g. Governments encourage higher workforce participation among seniors.

  19. financial security (noun phrase): sự an toàn tài chính

    E.g. Continued employment enhances financial security.

  20. society as a whole (noun phrase): toàn xã hội

    E.g. These policies benefit society as a whole.

 

Sentence Structures

1. I generally support the idea that + clause because + clause (dùng để nêu quan điểm)

E.g. I generally support the idea that older adults should work longer because it benefits both individuals and society.

2. One major advantage of + gerund phrase + is the + noun phrase (dùng để trình bày lợi ích)

E.g. One major advantage of continuing to work is the maintenance of financial independence.

3. Furthermore, + noun phrase + provide(s) + noun phrase, helping + noun phrase + verb (dùng để mở rộng ý)

E.g. Furthermore, employment provides social interaction, helping seniors avoid loneliness.

4. However, + noun phrase + may make it difficult to + verb (dùng để trình bày hạn chế)

E.g. However, declining health may make it difficult to perform demanding tasks.

5. Nevertheless, these concerns should not prevent + noun phrase + from + gerund phrase (dùng để phản biện)

E.g. Nevertheless, these concerns should not prevent capable seniors from remaining in the workforce.

6. In conclusion, although + clause, I support + noun phrase + because + clause (dùng để kết luận)

E.g. In conclusion, although working longer is not suitable for everyone, I support this idea because it promotes financial security and social engagement.

 


 

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