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IELTS Writing Practice: Some people believe that art classes like painting and drawing are equally important as other school subjects for children’s development and should be made compulsory
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1. Xây dựng ý tưởng

 

Đề bài

Some people believe that art classes like painting and drawing are equally important as other school subjects for children’s development and should be made compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this belief?

Dạng bài

Agree or disagree essay

Xác định chủ đề và luận điểm

Topic: Arts Education and Child Development

 

Luận điểm 1: Art education should be compulsory

  • Creative thinking: tư duy sáng tạo

  • Emotional expression: khả năng biểu đạt cảm xúc

  • Cognitive development: phát triển nhận thức

  • Problem-solving skills: kỹ năng giải quyết vấn đề

  • Stress reduction: giảm căng thẳng

  • Self-confidence building: xây dựng sự tự tin

  • Holistic education: giáo dục toàn diện

 

Luận điểm 2: Art should remain optional

  • Academic priorities: ưu tiên học thuật

  • Limited school budgets: ngân sách trường học hạn chế

  • Different student interests: khác biệt về sở thích học sinh

  • Career relevance: tính liên quan nghề nghiệp

  • Curriculum overload: chương trình học quá tải

  • Time allocation issues: vấn đề phân bổ thời gian

  • Specialized learning preferences: xu hướng học chuyên biệt

 

Triển khai ý tưởng

 

Position 1

Although academic subjects remain essential, I strongly believe that art education should be compulsory because it contributes significantly to children's intellectual, emotional, and social development.

→ Mặc dù các môn học học thuật vẫn rất quan trọng, tôi tin rằng giáo dục nghệ thuật nên là môn bắt buộc vì nó đóng góp lớn cho sự phát triển trí tuệ, cảm xúc và xã hội của trẻ.

Ví dụ:

School painting competitions

Creative classroom projects

 

Position 2

While art classes offer valuable developmental benefits, I believe schools should allow students to choose whether to study art based on their interests and academic goals.

→ Mặc dù các lớp nghệ thuật mang lại nhiều lợi ích phát triển, tôi tin rằng nhà trường nên cho học sinh quyền lựa chọn dựa trên sở thích và mục tiêu học tập.

Ví dụ:

Elective design courses

Specialized science programs

 


 

2. Lập dàn ý cho đề theo PEEL

Introduction

  • Paraphrase: debate over compulsory art education in high schools

  • Debate: equal importance of art and academic subjects

  • Thesis: art classes should be compulsory because they support holistic development

 

Body Paragraph 1

  • Point: art education supports intellectual and emotional growth

  • Evidence: creativity, self-expression, confidence, problem-solving

  • Explanation: artistic activities develop skills beyond traditional academics

  • Link: students become more balanced learners

 

Body Paragraph 2

  • Point: compulsory art classes may create academic and practical challenges

  • Evidence: overloaded curriculum, limited budgets, diverse interests

  • Explanation: not all students pursue creative careers

  • Link: benefits still outweigh implementation challenges

 

Conclusion

  • Summary: both perspectives have merit

  • Restate: compulsory art education brings greater long-term value

 


 

3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

Many people argue that subjects such as mathematics, science, and languages should receive greater attention in school than creative disciplines. However, I strongly believe that art classes such as painting and drawing are equally important for children's overall development and should be made compulsory in high schools because they support creativity, emotional growth, and a more holistic education.

One of the most important benefits of art education is its ability to develop creative thinking. Unlike many traditional academic subjects that focus on fixed answers, artistic activities encourage students to experiment, explore different perspectives, and develop original ideas. This process also strengthens problem-solving skills, as students often need to make independent decisions about design, color, and composition. In addition, art provides opportunities for emotional expression, allowing teenagers to communicate feelings that may be difficult to express verbally. This can be particularly valuable during adolescence, a stage often associated with emotional challenges and academic pressure.

Another important advantage is that art contributes significantly to cognitive development and personal confidence. Activities such as drawing and painting improve concentration, visual analysis, and attention to detail. At the same time, completing creative projects can support self-confidence building, especially when students receive recognition for their work. Furthermore, artistic activities may contribute to stress reduction, helping students maintain better mental health while coping with demanding academic schedules.

Admittedly, making art compulsory may create certain challenges, such as curriculum overload, limited teaching resources, and varying student interests. Some students may prefer more specialized academic pathways that appear more directly related to future careers. Nevertheless, education should not focus solely on examination performance or career preparation.

Overall, I firmly believe that art classes should be compulsory in high schools because they contribute to intellectual growth, emotional well-being, and the development of well-rounded individuals.

(Word count: 316)

 


 

4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

  1. holistic education (noun phrase): giáo dục toàn diện
    E.g. Modern schools increasingly emphasize holistic education.

  2. creative thinking (noun phrase): tư duy sáng tạo
    E.g. Group projects often encourage creative thinking.

  3. problem-solving skills (noun phrase): kỹ năng giải quyết vấn đề
    E.g. Employers highly value problem-solving skills.

  4. emotional expression (noun phrase): khả năng biểu đạt cảm xúc
    E.g. Music can become a powerful form of emotional expression.

  5. cognitive development (noun phrase): phát triển nhận thức
    E.g. Reading plays an important role in cognitive development.

  6. self-confidence building (noun phrase): xây dựng sự tự tin
    E.g. Public speaking supports self-confidence building.

  7. stress reduction (noun phrase): giảm căng thẳng
    E.g. Physical exercise contributes to stress reduction.

  8. curriculum overload (noun phrase): chương trình học quá tải
    E.g. Many teenagers suffer from curriculum overload.

  9. academic pressure (noun phrase): áp lực học tập
    E.g. Competitive schools often create high academic pressure.

  10. visual analysis (noun phrase): khả năng phân tích hình ảnh
    E.g. Architecture students need strong visual analysis.

  11. attention to detail (noun phrase): sự chú ý đến chi tiết
    E.g. Design work requires excellent attention to detail.

  12. creative projects (noun phrase): dự án sáng tạo
    E.g. Schools should organize more creative projects.

  13. teaching resources (noun phrase): nguồn lực giảng dạy
    E.g. Rural schools often lack sufficient teaching resources.

  14. specialized academic pathways (noun phrase): định hướng học thuật chuyên sâu
    E.g. Some students choose specialized academic pathways early.

  15. well-rounded individuals (noun phrase): những cá nhân phát triển toàn diện
    E.g. Education should aim to produce well-rounded individuals.

  16. traditional academic subjects (noun phrase): các môn học học thuật truyền thống
    E.g. Parents often prioritize traditional academic subjects.

  17. original ideas (noun phrase): ý tưởng độc đáo
    E.g. Innovation begins with original ideas.

  18. independent decisions (noun phrase): quyết định độc lập
    E.g. Teenagers should learn to make independent decisions.

  19. mental health (noun phrase): sức khỏe tinh thần
    E.g. Schools should pay more attention to mental health.

  20. demanding academic schedules (noun phrase): lịch học căng thẳng
    E.g. University students often face demanding academic schedules.

 

Sentence Structures

1. Although + clause, I strongly believe + clause (dùng để nhượng bộ trước khi khẳng định lập trường)

E.g. Although academic subjects remain essential, I strongly believe that art education should be compulsory because it contributes significantly to children's intellectual, emotional, and social development.

2. Unlike + noun phrase, subject + verb (dùng để so sánh sự khác biệt)

E.g. Unlike many traditional academic subjects that focus on fixed answers, artistic activities encourage students to experiment, explore different perspectives, and develop original ideas.

3. In addition, subject + provides + noun phrase (dùng để bổ sung lợi ích)

E.g. In addition, art provides opportunities for emotional expression, allowing teenagers to communicate feelings that may be difficult to express verbally.

4. At the same time, V-ing + can + verb (dùng để diễn đạt tác động song song)

E.g. At the same time, completing creative projects can support self-confidence building, especially when students receive recognition for their work.

5. Admittedly, V-ing + may + verb (dùng để thừa nhận hạn chế)

E.g. Admittedly, making art compulsory may create certain challenges, such as curriculum overload, limited teaching resources, and varying student interests.

6. Overall, I firmly believe that + clause (dùng để kết luận với lập trường rõ ràng)

E.g. Overall, I firmly believe that art classes should be compulsory in high schools because they contribute to intellectual growth, emotional well-being, and the development of well-rounded individuals.

 


 

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