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IELTS Writing Practice: The only reason why people work hard is to earn money and there is no other reason for doing so. To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?
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1. Xây dựng ý tưởng

Đề bài

The only reason why people work hard is to earn money and there is no other reason for doing so. To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?

Dạng bài

Agree or Disagree Essay

Xác định chủ đề và luận điểm

Topic: Reasons People Work Hard

 

Luận điểm 1: Money is an important motivation

Financial security and stability: sự ổn định và an toàn tài chính

Ability to support family members: khả năng chu cấp cho gia đình

Improved standard of living: cải thiện mức sống

Opportunity to achieve personal financial goals: cơ hội đạt được các mục tiêu tài chính cá nhân

Access to better housing, healthcare, and education: tiếp cận nhà ở, y tế và giáo dục tốt hơn

Incentive for career advancement: động lực để thăng tiến nghề nghiệp

 

Luận điểm 2: Other motivations beyond money

Sense of personal achievement: cảm giác thành tựu cá nhân

Passion for a profession: đam mê nghề nghiệp

Desire to contribute to society: mong muốn đóng góp cho xã hội

Pursuit of professional growth: theo đuổi sự phát triển nghề nghiệp

Recognition and respect from others: sự công nhận và tôn trọng từ người khác

Fulfillment of personal ambitions: thực hiện các hoài bão cá nhân

 

Triển khai ý tưởng

 

Position

I disagree with the idea that money is the sole reason people work hard. Although financial rewards are important, many individuals are also motivated by personal satisfaction, career development, and the desire to make a positive contribution to society.

→ Tôi không đồng ý với quan điểm cho rằng tiền bạc là lý do duy nhất khiến mọi người làm việc chăm chỉ. Mặc dù phần thưởng tài chính rất quan trọng, nhiều người còn được thúc đẩy bởi sự hài lòng cá nhân, sự phát triển nghề nghiệp và mong muốn đóng góp tích cực cho xã hội.

Ví dụ:

Doctors dedicating themselves to improving patients' health

Scientists conducting research to solve important global problems

 


 

2. Lập dàn ý cho đề theo PEEL

 

Introduction

Paraphrase: some people believe earning money is the only motivation for hard work

Question: extent of agreement or disagreement

Thesis: I disagree because people often work hard for a variety of personal, professional, and social reasons beyond financial gain

 

Body Paragraph 1

Point: money is undoubtedly a major motivation

Evidence: living expenses, family responsibilities, career incentives, financial goals

Explanation: individuals need income to maintain a comfortable lifestyle and financial security

Link: financial rewards encourage productivity and commitment at work

 

Body Paragraph 2

Point: many non-financial motivations influence people's efforts

Evidence: passion, achievement, social contribution, recognition, personal growth

Explanation: people often seek fulfillment and meaning through their careers

Link: these motivations can be just as powerful as financial incentives

 

Conclusion

Summary: money plays an important role, but it is not the only reason people work hard

Restate: a combination of financial and non-financial motivations drives individuals to achieve success

 


 

3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

Some people argue that the only reason individuals work hard is to earn money. While financial rewards are undoubtedly an important motivation, I disagree with this view because many people are also driven by personal fulfillment, professional development, and a desire to contribute to society.

It is true that money plays a significant role in motivating people to work hard. Most individuals need a stable income to meet their daily expenses and achieve financial security and stability. In addition, many people work diligently because of their ability to support family members, including paying for housing, healthcare, and education. Financial incentives also provide an opportunity to achieve personal financial goals, such as purchasing a home or saving for retirement. Therefore, money is often a powerful factor that encourages individuals to improve their performance and advance in their careers.

However, financial rewards are not the only source of motivation. Many people work hard because they gain a sense of personal achievement from accomplishing challenging tasks and reaching professional milestones. Others are motivated by a passion for a profession, particularly in fields such as education, medicine, and scientific research. Furthermore, some individuals are driven by a desire to contribute to society and make a positive difference in the lives of others. Teachers, for example, often devote considerable effort to helping students succeed despite not always receiving high salaries. Similarly, many researchers pursue innovations that can improve public health or solve environmental problems. These examples demonstrate that fulfillment of personal ambitions and social contributions can be equally important sources of motivation.

In conclusion, although money is an essential reason why people work hard, it is certainly not the only one. Personal satisfaction, professional growth, and the desire to benefit society also play crucial roles in motivating individuals to perform at their best.

(Word count: 301)

 


 

4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

 

  1. financial security and stability (noun phrase): sự ổn định và an toàn tài chính

    E.g. Most employees seek financial security and stability through their careers.

  2. ability to support family members (noun phrase): khả năng chu cấp cho gia đình

    E.g. Parents value the ability to support family members.

  3. improved standard of living (noun phrase): cải thiện mức sống

    E.g. A higher salary can lead to an improved standard of living.

  4. opportunity to achieve personal financial goals (noun phrase): cơ hội đạt được mục tiêu tài chính cá nhân

    E.g. Hard work provides the opportunity to achieve personal financial goals.

  5. access to better housing, healthcare, and education (noun phrase): tiếp cận nhà ở, y tế và giáo dục tốt hơn

    E.g. Stable employment ensures access to better housing, healthcare, and education.

  6. incentive for career advancement (noun phrase): động lực để thăng tiến nghề nghiệp

    E.g. Bonuses can be an incentive for career advancement.

  7. sense of personal achievement (noun phrase): cảm giác thành tựu cá nhân

    E.g. Many professionals gain a sense of personal achievement from their work.

  8. passion for a profession (noun phrase): đam mê nghề nghiệp

    E.g. Success often comes from a genuine passion for a profession.

  9. desire to contribute to society (noun phrase): mong muốn đóng góp cho xã hội

    E.g. Volunteers are motivated by a desire to contribute to society.

  10. pursuit of professional growth (noun phrase): theo đuổi sự phát triển nghề nghiệp

    E.g. Employees value the pursuit of professional growth.

  11. recognition and respect from others (noun phrase): sự công nhận và tôn trọng từ người khác

    E.g. Many workers appreciate recognition and respect from others.

  12. fulfillment of personal ambitions (noun phrase): thực hiện các hoài bão cá nhân

    E.g. Entrepreneurship can lead to the fulfillment of personal ambitions.

  13. daily expenses (noun phrase): chi phí sinh hoạt hằng ngày

    E.g. Salaries help individuals cover daily expenses.

  14. financial incentives (noun phrase): động lực tài chính

    E.g. Companies often use financial incentives to motivate employees.

  15. professional milestones (noun phrase): cột mốc nghề nghiệp

    E.g. Promotions are important professional milestones.

  16. scientific research (noun phrase): nghiên cứu khoa học

    E.g. Governments invest heavily in scientific research.

  17. positive difference (noun phrase): tác động tích cực

    E.g. Teachers aim to make a positive difference in students' lives.

  18. public health (noun phrase): sức khỏe cộng đồng

    E.g. Medical innovations can improve public health.

  19. environmental problems (noun phrase): các vấn đề môi trường

    E.g. Scientists are working to solve environmental problems.

  20. perform at their best (verb phrase): làm việc với hiệu suất cao nhất

    E.g. Motivated employees tend to perform at their best.

 

Sentence Structures

1. While + noun phrase + be + adjective, I disagree with this view because + clause (dùng để nêu quan điểm)

E.g. While financial rewards are important, I disagree with this view because many people are motivated by factors beyond money.

2. It is true that + clause because + clause (dùng để công nhận luận điểm đối lập)

E.g. It is true that money plays a significant role because individuals need income to meet their daily expenses.

3. In addition, + noun phrase + work(s) diligently because of + noun phrase (dùng để mở rộng ý)

E.g. In addition, many people work diligently because of their ability to support family members.

4. Many people work hard because they gain + noun phrase + from + V-ing (dùng để nêu động lực khác)

E.g. Many people work hard because they gain a sense of personal achievement from accomplishing challenging tasks.

5. Furthermore, some individuals are driven by + noun phrase + to + verb + noun phrase (dùng để giải thích)

E.g. Furthermore, some individuals are driven by a desire to contribute to society and improve the lives of others.

6. In conclusion, although + noun phrase + be + adjective, it is certainly not the only + noun phrase (dùng để kết luận)

E.g. In conclusion, although money is an essential motivation, it is certainly not the only reason people work hard.

 


 

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