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IELTS Writing Practice: There is a belief that young individuals must attend school full-time until they are at least 18 years old. To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?
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1. Xây dựng ý tưởng

Đề bài

There is a belief that young individuals must attend school full-time until they are at least 18 years old. To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?

Dạng bài

Agree or Disagree essay

Xác định chủ đề và luận điểm

Topic: Compulsory Education

 

Luận điểm 1: Reasons supporting compulsory full-time education until 18

Equal access to educational opportunities: tiếp cận cơ hội giáo dục bình đẳng

Development of essential knowledge and skills: phát triển kiến thức và kỹ năng thiết yếu

Better career prospects in the future: cơ hội nghề nghiệp tốt hơn trong tương lai

Reduction in youth unemployment: giảm thất nghiệp ở thanh thiếu niên

Improved social and personal development: phát triển xã hội và cá nhân tốt hơn

Preparation for higher education and modern workplaces: chuẩn bị cho giáo dục đại học và môi trường làm việc hiện đại

 

Luận điểm 2: Arguments against compulsory education until 18

Different learning preferences and career goals: sở thích học tập và định hướng nghề nghiệp khác nhau

Interest in vocational training: mong muốn học nghề

Financial pressures on some families: áp lực tài chính đối với một số gia đình

Early entry into the workforce: tham gia lao động sớm

Lack of motivation among some students: thiếu động lực học tập ở một số học sinh

Need for flexible educational pathways: cần những lộ trình giáo dục linh hoạt

Triển khai ý tưởng

 

Position

I largely agree that young people should remain in full-time education until the age of 18 because it equips them with the knowledge and skills needed for adulthood. However, vocational programs should also be available for students with different career aspirations.

→ Tôi phần lớn đồng ý rằng thanh niên nên học toàn thời gian đến năm 18 tuổi vì điều này trang bị cho họ kiến thức và kỹ năng cần thiết cho cuộc sống trưởng thành. Tuy nhiên, các chương trình đào tạo nghề cũng nên được cung cấp cho những học sinh có định hướng nghề nghiệp khác nhau.

Ví dụ:

Students gaining qualifications before entering the labor market

Vocational schools preparing learners for skilled occupations

 


 

2. Lập dàn ý cho đề theo PEEL

 

Introduction

Paraphrase: some people believe all young people should stay in school full-time until at least 18

Question: extent of agreement or disagreement

Thesis: I largely agree because education improves future opportunities, although flexible vocational options should be available

 

Body Paragraph 1

Point: staying in school until 18 provides important benefits

Evidence: knowledge, skills, qualifications, social development, employability

Explanation: modern jobs increasingly require advanced education and training

Link: compulsory education helps young people prepare for adulthood

 

Body Paragraph 2

Point: some students may benefit from alternative pathways

Evidence: vocational education, practical training, different learning styles

Explanation: not all students thrive in traditional academic settings

Link: governments should maintain compulsory learning while allowing flexibility in how it is delivered

 

Conclusion

Summary: education until 18 is generally beneficial

Restate: compulsory learning should continue, but students should have access to both academic and vocational routes

 


 

3. Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

Some people believe that all young individuals should attend school full-time until they reach the age of 18. I largely agree with this view because education plays a vital role in preparing young people for future employment and responsible adulthood. However, I also believe that vocational pathways should be available for those with different interests and abilities.

One major reason for keeping students in education until 18 is that it provides equal access to educational opportunities and helps them acquire essential knowledge. Modern societies increasingly require workers to possess advanced qualifications and a broad range of skills. Remaining in school allows students to continue the development of essential knowledge and skills, improving their chances of securing stable employment later in life. In addition, schools contribute to improved social and personal development by teaching communication, teamwork, and critical thinking. These abilities are valuable not only in the workplace but also in everyday life. Therefore, compulsory education can help young people build a stronger foundation for the future.

Nevertheless, not all students benefit equally from a purely academic education. Some may have practical talents and prefer vocational training instead. Providing flexible educational pathways enables students to develop job-specific skills while continuing their education. For example, vocational programs can prepare learners for careers in engineering, construction, or healthcare. This approach allows students to pursue their strengths without leaving education prematurely. Consequently, compulsory learning should not necessarily mean compulsory academic study.

In conclusion, I support the idea that young people should remain in education until the age of 18 because it enhances their future opportunities and personal development. However, governments should ensure that both academic and vocational options are available to meet the needs of different learners.

(Word count: 295)

 


 

4. Lexical Resources List

 

New Vocabulary

  1. equal access to educational opportunities (noun phrase): tiếp cận cơ hội giáo dục bình đẳng

    E.g. Governments should promote equal access to educational opportunities.

  2. development of essential knowledge and skills (noun phrase): phát triển kiến thức và kỹ năng thiết yếu

    E.g. Schools support the development of essential knowledge and skills.

  3. better career prospects in the future (noun phrase): cơ hội nghề nghiệp tốt hơn trong tương lai

    E.g. Education leads to better career prospects in the future.

  4. reduction in youth unemployment (noun phrase): giảm thất nghiệp ở thanh thiếu niên

    E.g. Training programs contribute to the reduction in youth unemployment.

  5. improved social and personal development (noun phrase): phát triển xã hội và cá nhân tốt hơn

    E.g. School activities encourage improved social and personal development.

  6. preparation for higher education and modern workplaces (noun phrase): chuẩn bị cho giáo dục đại học và môi trường làm việc hiện đại

    E.g. Secondary education provides preparation for higher education and modern workplaces.

  7. different learning preferences and career goals (noun phrase): sở thích học tập và định hướng nghề nghiệp khác nhau

    E.g. Students have different learning preferences and career goals.

  8. interest in vocational training (noun phrase): mong muốn học nghề

    E.g. Some teenagers show an interest in vocational training.

  9. financial pressures on some families (noun phrase): áp lực tài chính đối với một số gia đình

    E.g. Financial pressures on some families may affect educational choices.

  10. early entry into the workforce (noun phrase): tham gia lao động sớm

    E.g. Some young people prefer early entry into the workforce.

  11. lack of motivation among some students (noun phrase): thiếu động lực học tập ở một số học sinh

    E.g. Schools must address the lack of motivation among some students.

  12. flexible educational pathways (noun phrase): lộ trình giáo dục linh hoạt

    E.g. Governments should provide flexible educational pathways.

  13. advanced qualifications (noun phrase): bằng cấp chuyên môn cao

    E.g. Many professions require advanced qualifications.

  14. stable employment (noun phrase): việc làm ổn định

    E.g. Education increases access to stable employment.

  15. critical thinking (noun phrase): tư duy phản biện

    E.g. Schools help students develop critical thinking.

  16. practical talents (noun phrase): năng khiếu thực hành

    E.g. Some learners possess strong practical talents.

  17. job-specific skills (noun phrase): kỹ năng chuyên biệt cho công việc

    E.g. Vocational courses teach job-specific skills.

  18. vocational programs (noun phrase): chương trình đào tạo nghề

    E.g. Many students benefit from vocational programs.

  19. prematurely leave education (verb phrase): rời bỏ giáo dục quá sớm

    E.g. Governments should discourage students from prematurely leaving education.

  20. future opportunities (noun phrase): cơ hội trong tương lai

    E.g. Education creates more future opportunities.

 

Sentence Structures

1. I largely agree with this view because + clause (dùng để nêu quan điểm)

E.g. I largely agree with this view because education plays a vital role in preparing young people for future employment.

2. One major reason for + V-ing + noun phrase + is that + clause (dùng để trình bày lý do)

E.g. One major reason for keeping students in education until 18 is that it provides equal access to educational opportunities.

3. Remaining in + noun phrase + allows + noun phrase + to + verb + noun phrase (dùng để giải thích lợi ích)

E.g. Remaining in school allows students to continue the development of essential knowledge and skills.

4. In addition, + noun phrase + contribute(s) to + noun phrase + by + V-ing (dùng để mở rộng ý)

E.g. In addition, schools contribute to improved social and personal development by teaching communication and teamwork.

5. Providing + noun phrase + enables + noun phrase + to + verb + noun phrase (dùng để đề xuất giải pháp)

E.g. Providing flexible educational pathways enables students to develop job-specific skills while continuing their education.

6. In conclusion, I support the idea that + clause because + clause (dùng để kết luận)

E.g. In conclusion, I support the idea that young people should remain in education until the age of 18 because it enhances their future opportunities and personal development.

 


 

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